Perfect Persuasive writing

This is my persuasive writing from the start of term 3. I chose this subject because of our inquiry this term which is on the power of innovation. This persuasive writing is going to help us because we are doing speeches later in the term. I think I have done really well for writing a lot of words about this subject.

Why we should fill up the Red Zones

Hello, I'm Dylan and I am going to tell you why we need to fill up the red zones. In this persuasive writing piece, I am going to tell you what we should build in the multiple red zones. Some of my ideas are a mountain bike trail, a running trail, a dog park, a bike pump track and more.

 For my first point, we need to build some things but they need to be careful how tall they are and the weight. But a reason we need to get creative to fill up spaces is that we have too many places that are empty. And if we build some things it might bring people from around the world and some of those people might make friendships.

 Onto my second point, which is why we need more attractions. If we get more attractions to come into the red zone it will get more money for the council so even more things can be built and so they can afford to make even more things. And because a lot of people moved away after the earthquakes it might bring people back to Christchurch. And if there are moving events held in the red zone parking outside of the red zone will be full people will have to walk miles.

That comes to my next point, why we need to make the roads again. If we do then it will be easier to get around to things on the other side instead of taking the long way around the outside. We could just open the roads for short times only or just make a barrier so you have to pay to get in and it will bring more money to hold multiple events.

 As for the old buildings people could do street art in a really bright picture to bring joy and happiness because of the bright colours. They could also add special effects like the 3D wall in town. If people see that it could make them really happy. They could also hold a reunion for the people who used to live in the red zones. They could also add in some small sporting grounds for rugby and soccer and other things. If they did all of this then I would be very glad.

But what we need to do to attract worldwide sporting events is a world-class sporting centre. And that would bring lots of people from around the world to come and eat in our restaurants and sleep in our hotels. All of those people would be spending what we need. Money.

Most of these things would all have to be made without heavy machinery because we can’t risk more liquefaction rising up. Do you reckon all this will work if we had the choice to do this? Do you reckon this is possible? Because I do. Would you agree with me?